DRAFT ONE
A Deeper Look into Broken Marriages
The chart tells us that the divorce rate in 1980 was only about 5%. But the rate increased 13% in 1990 that 18 marriages in every 83 will be broken.
And the rate was even higher in 2000, which reaches 28%.
It’s quite an astonishing change. But, why?
I think the reason is that with the growing demand of a free life, more and more couples prefer to divorce when they find that them are no suitable for each other, instead of keeping their broken relation – what is normally chosen decades ago.
The world is becoming free, people nowadays strongly wish a life that can enjoy themselves with out any avoidable annoys.
So may be choosing to divorce is quite a good way to leave the difficult situation.
Leaving the troubles that a broken marriage will bring to you, and getting a free life by choosing to divorce. May be, it’s the reason that cause the high divorce rate today.
点评：可能是因为时间的关系，第一稿读来很平淡，无论从思想中心上还是语言修辞上都没有什么亮点。自己感觉很糟糕。内容上可能比较空洞，准备在二稿的时候在继续挖深下主题。争取写得出色一点。一稿主要只是讲述了现在离婚率高的一个原因，并没有做到DEEPER LOOK。而就具体来说，离婚比例上升只是反映了一个社会现象，并没有对错。不过，这个数据背后所反映的现象和社会风气确实值得考虑的。二稿的时候可能就这一方面加以深化。
DRAFT TWO
A Deeper Look into Broken Marriages
The chart tells us that the divorce rate in 1980 was only about 5%. But it increased by 13% in 1990 that 18 marriages in every 100 will be broken. What’s more, it was even higher in 2000, which reaches 22%. And the increasing is still continuing.
It’s quite astonishing. But, why?
In my point of view, the most important reason is that with people’s growing demand of free lives, more and more couples chose to divorce when they find they are no suitable for each other, instead of keeping their broken relation – which is normally chosen decades ago.
The world is becoming free, people nowadays strongly wish a life in which they can enjoy themselves with out any avoidable annoys.
So, may be choosing to divorce is quite a good way to leave the difficult situation.
We can’t tell whether this phenomenon is good or not. To be more exact, it just shows the tendency that people will do nowadays when some serious problems occur in their marriages. But what the increasing rate tell us? That’s a hard question. Everyone can have his own opinion. And any of these opinions could be right.
Fortunately, what we care about was not the reason why it is increasing but the social attitude and culture change behind this simply increasing of number.
In our traditional Chinese culture, choosing to divorce was no doubt an embarrass thing. If you said that you want to break up with your husband or wife, people around you will put a different look on you. And under this kind of latent pressure, you may have to give up the idea in order to save your reputation.
Now the world changes and people view things at the basis of personal satisfactory. The first intention is to meet the demands or satisfactory instead of to gain a face-saving condition.
So, another important factor should be the chain effect.
With more and more people who have domestic problems choose to divorce, people start to view it as a normal case. This results that the public against disappears steadily. And it also firms the decision of one who intends to divorce.
So my opinion is, by the desire to leave the troubles that a broken marriage brings to you, to get a free life, and in the society that being divorced is no longer a embarrass thing, the astonishing increasing rate in the chart will not be so amazing any more.
